Naked in the shadow of love
I saw her dancing ov’r the rain
Dusk was hanging around salted dew
When her heart devoured dulcet pain
She told me not to leave her lone
behind the cloak of dark-hours,
I kissed her auburn hair
& whispered: “This night’s whole ours..”
“.. I’ll keep you inside my heart
but am afraid of pastel tint of morn,
Morn-lit makes me getting disappeared..
somewhere into the dune of haunted-home”
She listened to me with closed eyes
but with an open heart
Her index finger waved ‘pon my very lips
& I lost my every ache into the mist of dessert
She eluded the space;
danced along the pit-pats of colden-rain
I watched her from far place
& framed up her image across the corners of my molten brain
I saw...
The sudden rain was getting violent on her
but she ain’t stop dancin’,
I took her hand; pulled it strongly to my chest
O' she got struck in me along frozen participation... glancing
"Her glossy hair; wet body & soften eyes
appeared alike a glimpse of heaven
that deserved to be swallowed under rainy-night,
no matter if i'm ten & she's eleven"
Then what... ?
The rain stopped falling;
Winds hit the break not to wave anymore;
Silence found everywhere
O' the storm was probably seemed to be gone
I took her inside the room;
locked the door...
& we loved each other till the appearance of impulsive morn.
~*~*~
Chloe, is anew writer, from "Vietnam", who comes to visit my page & writes in a very simplistic way:
ReplyDeleteChloe: "Beautiful poem. I can feel the romance in every line. Well done!"
Julie:
ReplyDeleteI love romantic poetry and this is breathtaking. Not only did you create some lovely images, but the poem has a magical feel to it - as if floating in a dream.
Julie
A writer with a "pen name" addressed "dreamland" stops by & leaves a review to my page:
ReplyDeleteOh.. what a gorgeous write!! love the scenery, the sounds, the aromas filling the senses, and that drunken state feeling that leaves me with.
wow.. so happy to have come across it. :D
Mskendra Renee, from Gainesville, FL, enjoyed reading my poetry which further led her to writing the below words:
ReplyDelete"the words you use are very captivating as well as the poem especially . i love " She listened to me with closed eyes but with an open heart. Her index finger waved ‘pon my very lips & I lost my every ache into the mist of dessert." so passionate! thanks for sharing. (wishing the rating could go pass 100)"
Kelly:
ReplyDelete"I love when the elements of nature are construed throughout a poem, like you've done here with rain."
Ruth, anew writer, from "U.K" who comes across the realm of my hell-zone & leaves some dulcet words into the review:
ReplyDeleteReally beautifully orchestrated! Rain adding to the tangible energy of this piece, enjoyed :)
Lynn:
ReplyDelete"Dear, I love rain. Find it cleansing, emotional and intimate at the same time. This was full of anticipation, sensual, and loaded with lots of vivid imagery...gorgeous"
Sarah Hampton, this's another anew writer of the day, from MA, who let er sweet words slip down smoothly into the review and states:
ReplyDelete"I love how the sensual energy arouses yet never looses depth. Great way to portray the lust in love. Excellent!"
Rubie:
ReplyDelete"This piece absolutely bombards the senses. And how fitting that it does, since passion does the same thing.
My favorite phrase: "the impulsive morn"
Wonderfully penned."
Tamika Finley, from Detroit, MI, reads my poetry and reviews:
ReplyDeleteDefinitely a visual work. Feels like I saw the scene in the storm
Jane Taylor Hardy, anew writer, review: A soft romantic poem. Nicely penned!
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